Sunday, March 17, 2013

Exploratory Essay Response

1. What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
 Overall the advice about making my paper stronger with different choosing different words and how to more effectively place my questions. I understand that my paper needs work and I really appreciate knowing where I can improve.I also liked that Megan recommended a few articles I could use because that was my biggest issue.

2. What was the least effective piece of advice you received? Explain.
At one part of my paper I was told to use quotations when stating something directly from the article. I feel as if I did do just that and may need her to explain it a little more so I can understand where I went wrong.

3. What questions do you have about Megan's comments?

  • You mentioned that in academic papers I should use formal language. What ways can I ensure that my words are formal and does that only apply to nouns?
  • When I consider my third article is it okay that I not go into depth about my third article if it is not as long as my first two article?

4. What are your plans for revision? Be specific.
My first step is to make the grammatical changes such as word choice and finding ways to start sentences in different ways. I also plan on finding a third article and trying to connect it to my thread that I already have.

Friday, March 15, 2013

Conference Response


  1. What advice did you receive from Megan?  Be specific.
At the meeting Megan suggested that I focus on Washington D.C, and study one minority as suppose to all of the minorities in America. Then she told me that it would be easier to either look at the neighborhood's impact on student's education or the teaching methods in those schools and how it affects the students success in college and the workforce. Also the group at my conference helped me find ways to measure "success" for students rather it be how many graduate and go to college or the types of careers those students pursue

2. What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.

The most helpful advice I received was to look into the different things that each neighborhood has to offer and how that may impact the student's life academically. I feel as if by looking into things such as violence, the type of households student's live in, and what opportunities are offered in those areas and then the type of grades students from those areas receive, I could make a connection between the two. I might even find more factors that have a big impact on how students perform academically.  

3. What was the least helpful advice you received? Explain.

The least helpful advice I received was to focus on a specific grade level. I didn't find that helpful because I want to use this project to figure out why students in general don't do well in school and who so many from my hometown drop out, or don't go to college. So I am not looking at a particular grade level rather that a collection of grades for example high school is what I hope to focus on because that is when students drop out. But who knows maybe my research will lead me to believe that students who do not do well in elementary or middle school are more likely to drop out.

4. Was the conference beneficial overall? Explain
YES! This conference has really sparked my thinking wheel and I am fueled with ways to approach my inquiry project. However I feel a little conflicted with where I want to go with my paper because of all of the ideas I have. On one hand I want to explore the community's impact on a student's academics and on the other hand I think that the schools should be tailored towards how the student's are affected by their communities and seek to help their student's on a more personal level. I also feel as if I should look into school curriculum as a state and see if that proves that traditional ways of teaching no longer work.

5.  Did Megan answer all your questions?  If not, what questions were left over?  Why didn’t they get answered?
Yes she answered all of my questions I may have more at a latter point in my research.

6. What are your plans for revision?  Be specific.  I should be able to understand exactly how your work will change in exactly which places.

My plans for revision are to re-read my essay and look at ways to clarify my points.


Monday, March 4, 2013

Exploratory Essay


Exploratory Essay

                In my English class we have delved deep into education from the sense that schools across the country do not prepare us for success instead they fill our minds with facts, numbers and general information. During our deep analysis of that matter we have read a few articles that argue that humanities and learning how to interact with others are essential to having success.
                For example in the article “On the Uses of Liberal Education” by Earl Shorris the writer identifies how humanities, which are prominent in rich communities and foreign to the poor social class communities, is a major factor that separates the rich from the poor. For example in the article Shorris states “The absence of politics in their lives was what kept them poor. I don’t mean “political” in the sense of voting in an election but in a way Theuydides used the word the word to mean activity with other people at every level”. This statement shows that in poor communities people are not as united as people who live in rich communities. In life we hear a lot of reasons for why those who work together can prosper much more than those who try and do it alone.  Historically the great people we talk about in the classrooms and are written about in textbooks or articles all had a support system to back them up, to help them become great. Shorris’ statement connects the must of cooperating with others to the prosperity of the entire community. Shorris argued that rich people know the importance of humanities because of their educational background. In the article Shorris states “Rich people learn these humanities in private schools and expensive colleges”. That statement shows a cycle that allow the rich kids to grow up and be rich and cause the poor kids to grow up and be poor. Not all schools teach the humanities that help students become successful and by Shorris’ statement most of the schools that do teach these important humanities are the expensive schools that only the rich can afford to go to. That leaves the poor students to attend schools that won’t prepare them for a successful future.
                Earl Shorris continues his argument by relating the acquisition of power to the rich and how they do it so effectively. Shorris believes that in our country the rich have all of the power because they have all of the money. Shorris sees humanities as a way to understand the everyday obstacles that come with living in this world. Shorris states “The humanities are a foundation for getting along in the world, for thinking , for learning to reflect on the world instead of just reacting to whatever is forced against you”. That statement shows that Shorris believes that humanities help people understand the thought process of others and how to go about handling situations that can greatly impact your life. But I wonder how do the rich get the power and what does money have to do with it? Shorris states that “If you want real power, legitimate power, the kind that comes from the people and belongs to the people, you must understand politics”. I understand that Shorris thinks that politics in the since of people communicating with others is the sole reason for why the rich have power. But I don’t understand how cooperating with others allows the rich elite to have power. I mean in the U.S the rich elite is the smallest of the social classes and they compete amongst themselves when it comes to business and money so where does the cooperation comes into play.  Earl Shorris used this article to show how the simple things we look overlook in our everyday lives like communicating and cooperating with others and connect that to a pressing issue that could plague those who will one day run this country.
                Jean Anyon, another writer who also believed that humanities are very important to the success of all people in our country, showed how education differs between social classes and how that structure prepared students to live in whatever social class their school is tailored to.  In the article titled “Social Class and the Hidden Curriculum” Jean Anyon separated schools based on social class and focused on how each school’s teaching effected the thought process of their students. For example in the article Anyon states “Scholars in political economy and the sociology of knowledge have recently argued that public schools in complex industrial societies like our own make available different types of educational experience and curriculum knowledge to students in different social classes”. That statement shows how our education system is like a factory and the students will be formed into the type of citizens that is common to the citizens in that area. This make sense because in our country there isn’t one school curriculum for the entire country, each state gets to create their own standards for their schools and then you have private schools that can have their own curriculum. Anyon doesn’t argue if allowing schools to differ from each other is a good or bad thing instead Anyon just shows how this effects the kids that will one day impact this country.  Anyon states “In the two working-class schools, work is following the steps of a procedure. The procedure is usually mechanical, involving rote behavior and very little decision making or choice. The teachers rarely explain why the work is being assigned, how it might connect to other assignments, or what the idea is that lies behind the procedure or gives it coherence and perhaps meaning or significance.”  The two working class relates to the students who come from poor families, and in their schools they are required to only record and remember the answer to the questions and are not asked to think about how to get the answers or ways in which the answer could be different. In this article the writer states “The products of work in this class are often highly valued by the children and the teacher”. In class the productivity of the class is determined by the material the teacher produces and what knowledge the students take away from the class. In our country that essentially is what categorizes students and show how successful they are becoming.
                When Jean Anyon talks about schools that are tailored towards the rich elite he shows how the students are able to express their personality through their work and truly find their own way of thinking. For example in the article Anyon states “Children are continually asked to reason through a problem, to produce intellectual products that are both logically sound and of top academic quality”. This statement shows that students discuss their work in search for more than just the answer, students leave schools with more than just information they also take away a personalize way of thinking and understanding of how others thinks which improve social skills and leadership. A common question that I don’t think that these writers are answering is how do you get the student to take an interest in their education? Also should the country allow states to create their own school system or should the government step in and crack down on the schools that are struggling to produce productive students?

Sunday, February 24, 2013

How to Workshop your Peers paper

Throughout this reading I read about how to critique a paper and the thought process you should go through when reading other people's work. My first impression was "yeah tell me something I don't know". The reason I thought that was because I understand that I'm not the teacher and I am not the one giving the grade instead I am giving my opinion and help clean up the grammatical errors I notice. The second part of the reading which talked about things like: where you should put your comments, how you should show where the writer may have made an error or where you think the writer could clarify a statement he/she has made. Now that part I don't think is to serious because if you explain the changes you've made then it shouldn't matter where you put a comment as long as you make it clear to writer that you had an issue about a specific part of their paper and why.

Sunday, February 17, 2013

On the Uses of Liberal Education

This reading like most readings we do in this class really peeked my interest. Education is something that I hope to use as my platform when I run for a seat in the Senate one day. This reading related to all of the negatives in life such as: isolation, racism and crime to poverty. Now I do agree that there are a lot of obstacles in front of you when you are growing up in a poor neighborhood. However I don't agree that racism is one of them simply because I can't think of any poor communities in which there are multiple races in one community. I also didn't understand how politics have anything to do with poor communities and why this article thinks it to be so important.

That paragraph about the teacher meeting his class intrigued me because I always wondered why kids grow up wanting to be teachers definitely a high school teacher.We all have been in those classes and felt sorry for the teacher that has to deal with the attitude and difficulties that come with an unruly class. Then you add a not so great pay check and well I guess all you have to go on is you passion for the students. I feel as if there are a lot of professions that I can't see why someone would want to pursue but I am glad that they are being filled because someone has to do it. In class we discussed a reading that claimed that schools prepare students for a career similar to those in the community in which the school resides. This reading backs up that argument from the point that the humanities which rich people greatly understand are not taught in all schools specifically those schools in poor communities. Add that with the fact that not all students go to college to get those humanity classes. In the ghettos and not-so glamorous neighborhoods schools are not institutes of educations instead they are day cares for teenagers, a social playground with false hopes of educating students enough to get out of those neighborhoods. I feel as if all teachers saw their careers as an opportunity to better students in their class and not as a job then they would actually make the extra effort to properly educate their students rather than do the bare minimum. 

The third thing that I took away from this article was that in school I believe that most adults for get that at home you still have responsibilities and juggling those along with getting an education is not easy. In poor neighborhoods similar to my own which most of my friends also come from I have witnessed kids needing to take care of their younger siblings because mom has to work, or every two weeks going to the prison to see your dad. Those things not only stress the body but the mind as well and if the schools are not willing to help these kids on a more personal level then they cannot truly educate or better the students that they are trying to impact.

Friday, February 8, 2013

Women in the working class response

My designated section of the reading was the "Boys are Buggin" section. Throughout the reading I gained mixed feelings about some of the things that were stated in the reading. Most of all I wondered where the writer was getting this information. Throughout my response it may seem as if I am jumping around from different topics but bare with me because I have a lot to say.

For one the writer stated that men "could not be counted on to support them and any children they might have". I totally disagree with this statement for one thing we live in a country in which the government system is dominated by men, an economy where majority of the wealthiest people in the US are men. So for someone to assume that men can't be counted on is incorrect. If by chance you were to bring up the amount of single-parent families, then you would also have to think of how many families have one parent because of a death in a family, and also not all single parent-families consist of the mother not the father.

Another topic that I found quite interesting was the part about women wearing make up and nice clothes when they go out. I for one was very intrigued when the writer stated that women don't wear make-up in order to attract men. Most men my age don't really find women with make-up to be attractive in fact I thing that it is very rare to find a girl that looks attractive with make-up on, however that might change when I'm older. So my question to the writer would be then who are you trying to impress, I mean I wouldn't spend hours getting ready if there is not anyone I am actually trying to impress.

The writer also mentioned girl's ability to get over certain rules in class that boys could not. I for one have definetly experienced that and wondered if that had anything to do with adults (especially male adults) not wanting to be too hard on females. The only thing I want to question is why not treat a girl as firmly as you would a boy? This reading reminded me of civil rights activist Susan B. Anthony who actually argued that women should be punished as much as a male would if he committed the same crime. That shows that this issue has plagued mankind for centuries and maybe it has something to do with the psychology around women being soft sensitive flowers that no one wants to see get hurt.

Furthermore the writer talked about how women do better in school than males, which I agree with but I think that it is because of men are men and women are women. To better explain what I mean, as a man sex and the want to be with a woman is constantly on our mind especially when women are around. So in class we are more interested in impressing our female classmates rather than pay attention in class. Men are often referred to as "dogs" because of how desperate we can see at times when actually it is not something we do intentionally its just that a female is so hard to figure out that we try so many things to attract her attention to the point that it seems pathetic. Now I don't know if women have the same issue with their hormones, but I extremely doubt it. Also if you think about it the reason that Morehouse is so effective at preparing men for the real world is because it is a male only school (Which leads me to believe that they have already figured out this obstacle).

Sunday, February 3, 2013

Questions about my Writing History

What is the most helpful advice you received? Explain.

The most helpful advice I have received came from my mom. Throughout my life I struggled with fitting in socially because of my Cerebral Palsy which caused me to have low self-esteem when I was younger. One thing I can remember my mom telling me when I was younger was that people can sense how confident you are and if you show that something about you is bothering you then  people will see it no matter how hard you try to hide it. That piece of advice is why I don't try to hide anything about who I am and I also don't use my own weaknesses as a crutch. In no way shape or form do I take pity on myself or use my Cerebral Palsy as an excuse for anything. I believe that if I don't have full faith in myself then everything I do is pointless.

What is the least helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.

The least helpful advice I have received came from my dad. One day when I was 16 or 17 he had told me that drugs will ruin you if you give it a chance. The reason I believe that that advice is not helpful because of all of the things that I struggle with in my life drugs is not one of them because for one everyone even some commercials tell you not to do drugs so saying it over and over again doesn't give me any extra knowledge or way of thinking.


What questions do you have about Megan's comment?

One thing you addressed about my paper was that I didn't clarify on what kind of writer I am. Well personally I don't understand what kind of answer you are looking for. I don't know what kind of categories you think of when assessing writers. I mean I think I am a good writer that can fully explain something if the information is available and I writer how I talk. I feel as if you are asking for something more because all of the things I can say about my writing are general things that I believe a good writer should have and I have some things I can work on as well. So my question to you is what kind of answer are you looking for? Which is why I asked you for an example in class, because I don't understand what am I suppose to be taking away from this assignment.

What are your plan's for revision?
Well my first step will be to address the comments stated in my paper. For example I will structure my paper as and actual essay rather than bullet points, also I will ask my teacher to have a conversation with me about this assignment because certain things she mentioned in the comments I would like for her to explain. After that I feel as if I will be able to complete this assignment appropriately.